Kia ora Leo. You are working very well with Felix to complete a lot of your work. I sure Felix is teaching lots of great digital skills. A little more detail on the supporting paragraph telling us what you did and how you did it, and a question, would help hook in your audience more.
Hi Leo, I wonder who looks after your park, mowing the lawns, cutting the trees etc? It looks like a great place to take a dog to have a play and a run around but I wonder if dogs are allowed in the park or if it is just for children? A few extra things for you to think about!!
Kia ora Leo. You are working very well with Felix to complete a lot of your work. I sure Felix is teaching lots of great digital skills. A little more detail on the supporting paragraph telling us what you did and how you did it, and a question, would help hook in your audience more.
ReplyDeleteHi Leo, I wonder who looks after your park, mowing the lawns, cutting the trees etc? It looks like a great place to take a dog to have a play and a run around but I wonder if dogs are allowed in the park or if it is just for children? A few extra things for you to think about!!
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